Hello and Welcome to Thursday Taster again. Talented writers from all over the blogosphere gather together to give
readers tasty parts of their work in progress, you can find the list here.
As I'm currently working on the edits of Rainbow Catcher,
that's the project I will be presenting until it is ready. Thank you for all the comments on last week's taster, I really appreciate. Today, we
continue right where we left off last week. As it's under editing, if
you see anything funny, hit me on the head in the comments.
“No
names,” the man answered with a low voice looking around like
fearing to be heard.
He
was breathing like a beef and smelling like it too. Jason was finding
it highly disgusting and was in a hurry to go away.
“What
kind of merchandise are you looking for?” the man said sitting
down. His weight, making the bench, bent under him with a cracking
sound. He put his attaché-case loudly on the table, it also seemed
very wet.
Jason
started to wonder if the man hadn’t been trying to escape someone
else before meeting him. The entire situation was more awkward than
expected. He had been waiting for someone professional who would do
the job quickly and properly.
“How
do you catch rainbow?” he asked.
“I
don’t catch them, I sell them, it’s what I’m good at,” the
fat man answered. “Now what do you want? I don’t have all day.”
“A
purple rainbow,” Jason answered.
“You’re
pretty greedy,” the man answered smirking, looking at Jason with a
calculator in his eyes like trying to figure out how much money he
could extract from the kid.
“It’s
not for me,” Jason answered.
“I
don’t need to know that. Will you have the money?” the man said.
“Yes,”
Jason answered.
“Thirty
four million swans is a lot of money,” the fat man said.
“The
advertisement said, fifteen million,” Jason answered.
“It’s
a purple rainbow we are talking about,” the fat man said.
“The
advertisement said fifteen million, if I wanted one for thirty four
million I would have called Everett Cooper,” Jason answered.
The
fat man started to shake. It took some time for Jason to realize that
it was his way of laughing.
“Do
you think I need you to buy it when there are so many other potential
buyers?” the fat man finally said.
“The
advertisement said fifteen million,” Jason repeated, trying to look
in the man’s porcine eyes. He knew that if he could hold it just
long enough he would win.
“Well,
advertisements say many things, you don’t have to read them so
carefully,” the fat man said. He was starting to feel like this kid
was not as easy to deal with as he would have imagined.
“But
I read it carefully enough, so will keep up with it,” Jason
answered.
The
fat man pretended to want to go out, but his weight was too heavy for
him and he fell back breathing like a beef on the bench. Decidedly
this wasn’t a good day. He soaked his forehead again with his wet
handkerchief that had left a stain on the bar’s wooden table and
shook again.
“Alright,
where do I deliver?” he said.
“Room
42, children section, Polysky general rainbow hospital,” Jason
said.
The
fat man made a huge effort to go up and took the rose from the table.
“I’ll
call you again when I have the merchandise,” he said, and walked to
the door slowly.
And
last night he had called again. Jason wondered how he had managed to
get a purple rainbow so rapidly.
Ah! I am sooooooo you changed your layout and I can find the comment section. Thank you. Now, your frist two sentences use 'like' several times. You might want to reconsider. I love the line "...beef on a bench." Fabulous. Very image provoking. And I am so curious how he found a purple rainbow, so rare and valuable, in just a few hours. Love this story. xo
ReplyDeleteThat guy sounds like a total creep! I truly hope the rainbow is a good one.
ReplyDeleteHmm, buying a rainbow. What an interesting concept.
ReplyDeleteIntriguing tale I would love to read more of...thanks for sharing
ReplyDeleteInteresting piece about the story.
ReplyDeleteI'm dying to know how he can get a purple rainbow. Love the taster
ReplyDeleteBuying a rainbow uh? How very interesting. I've got to find out how it all pans out.
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