Sunday, July 27, 2014

WeWriWar 61 Harajuku Kiss

Hi everyone, and welcome to a new blog post for the Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday.

Last weekend you have a little part of Demon and Fairy so this weekend we are coming back to Harajuku Kiss.

About Harajuku Kiss 
At times, life can be so depressing. She is walking her usual recovery tour in Harajuku, finishing with a crepe, trying to forget that her boyfriend dumped her once again for the week-end... When the unthinkable happens... A boy stops in front of her in the street and kisses her, in the middle of the street, before running away.
Trying to discover more about him, she is dragged into a dangerous game of mystery. A biologist has been murdered and a deadly virus is on the loose. First suspect: the mysterious Harajuku's stranger. 

Today we start at the very beginning: Meet Kaji.

Here are my 8 sentences.

He looked around with the only eye not yet swollen enough to be opened a little and counted his chances, just by habit. There were none. The dried blood on his neck and face almost forbade him to move, every movement felt like his skin tore apart. Even if he managed to get rid of the ropes around his hands and body, and to walk to the only door leading to the exit of the roof, they would catch him again. Someone in this building might want to help him, but why risk someone else’s life if they found him later. Hopelessness weighed on his chest. He wanted to apologize and to show he wasn’t such a bad and uncaring person. 

His tormentors had been gone for a while, trying to figure out where he left his documents.
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Answer to last week's comments: 
As I am putting the snippet for Demon and Fairy, in order, without skipping anything and I have been for a bit more than a year, there is no changing the snippet if it doesn't fit. So, as long as it doesn't distort the meaning of the story, I intend to keep on using creative punctuation when needed to leave a little cliff hanger.
I have no idea where the sexual part came from, maybe Teresa is right and it's contextual, maybe I should have written "he rubbed his face with a towel". All in all, he could smell the perfume on it and his nose is in the normal place, even if he is a demon. That's Seti on the cover on the left, if you need something more visual. 
I  used the perfumed towel to keep going about the fact that his parents are acting weird until the end. Of course, as the Chaos is now showing up, so things are going to accelerate a little, don't miss it next week.

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  1. His situation sounds very desperate. My fingers are crossed someone will try to help him. Thanks for sharing. :)

  2. Good snippet. You can feel his despair in this scene.

  3. Intense and intriguing snippet. Who's kidnapped him and what's in the documents? :)

  4. That's really good... very intense. You capture the grit and the grime and the pain very well.

  5. Wow, quite the tense situation. I hope he can think of something to save himself!

  6. Someone is certainly in a pickle! Nice excerpt.

  7. This is the first I've read of this story, Linda. Great premise! :-) I wonder if the kiss from a stranger was terrorism--passing the germs?

  8. Wow, sounds like this guy is in dire straights.