Buy Me a Coffee at ko-fi.com

Sunday, September 14, 2014

WeWriWar 68 Demon and Fairy


Hello everyone!

Welcome to Week-end Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday.
Here we are, back again for a new Excerpt of Demon and Fairy. Sorry for delayed comment or no comment at all last week, hopefully my boyfriend fixed my internet so I should be able to do better this time around.

In the previous episodes: Seti let the chaos got out of him as the father of his sister's fiance threaten to break the engagement. Wild, he flies to the beach to see the only person near whom he can get rid of the Chaos without pain, the fairy Kallisto in the Human world below his. He can only observe her through a tidal pool. But this time, she is in danger. Trying to rescue her from a snake, Seti lands in the world below. However, as Kallisto tries to touch him, he flies away back to his hidden place on the beach and listen to Kallisto's conversation with her best friend Kelpie who once again proposes to her and is refused. Kallisto needs to choose between Kelpie or going back to the fairy world to marry prince Kordelius. As the night comes, Kallisto goes home and so does Seti and of course his parents are all weird... (Remember, Seti used his forbidden power and left without an explanation... ) Then Seti was mysteriously pushed in his room, in the dark and apparently turned blind. This week, Seti is trying to control the Chaos who wants to take over his body.

Here are my 8 sentences, the weirdness continues (He is Seti and It is the Chaos). And we start where we left off last weeks


I can’t use my powers,” it yelled, adding some more pressure to Seti’s pain.
Fine!” Seti got up and managed to get to his bed.
He pushed the books and shoes lying on it. It didn’t matter anymore how chaotic things were around him, he couldn’t see a thing anyway.
If you don’t want to listen to me and to let me deal with it fine, do as you please but I’m just lying there, waiting,” Seti said.
He extended his wings on the bed and lay down, his hands holding his head firmly to stop the humming from making it shake. It seems like if his brain was hurting violently against his crane’s bones.
Let see who will have the most patience,” Seti thought, “I have nothing else to do anyway.”
 

Answer to last week's comments:
 
The Chaos is freaking out, but Seti doesn't know that yet... I guess trying to get it under control is not such a bad idea.
Chip: Stuff, just stuff, it's so dark that Seti doesn't see anything so we don't see anything either unless he touch it consciously. 

 
http://www.wattpad.com/user/Crazypuce

Follow my blog with Bloglovin
Find us on Google+

13 comments:

  1. Just started following your snippets but this books sounds fascinating cant wait to see more snippets!

    ReplyDelete
  2. And who will win this standoff? lol Enjoyed the snippet. :)

    ReplyDelete
  3. It will be interesting to see how long the wait lasts -- and what happens.

    ReplyDelete
  4. if you can't win by physical force, win by mental strength and patience is the best! great snippet!

    ReplyDelete
  5. I'm curious as to why it can't use its powers. Does it have to have Seti's cooperation to use them?

    ReplyDelete
  6. Great, visual scene. You described his pain and predicament really well.

    ReplyDelete
  7. I like Seti's attitude. I'll just wait it out : )

    ReplyDelete
  8. I like the description of pressure being added to pain; that's visceral. It would be nice to see more sensory description; how do things sound and feel when Seti's moving around and pushing the clutter away? :)

    ReplyDelete
  9. I like the description of pressure being added to pain; that's visceral. It would be nice to see more sensory description; how do things sound and feel when Seti's moving around and pushing the clutter away? :)

    ReplyDelete
  10. I feel bad for Seti. His pain is relentless. :(

    ReplyDelete
  11. Seti certainly seems like a determined individual. Good snippet.

    ReplyDelete
  12. Love the attitude in this snippet! Keep it coming.

    ReplyDelete