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Sunday, August 31, 2014

WeWriWar 66 Demon and Fairy


Hello everyone!

Welcome to Week-end Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday.
Here we are, back again for a new Excerpt of Demon and Fairy. This week, I entered pitch wars and I'm waiting for the results to come on September 3rd, so cross your fingers for me. 

In the previous episodes: Seti let the chaos got out of him as the father of his sister's fiance threaten to break the engagement. Wild, he flies to the beach to see the only person near whom he can get rid of the Chaos without pain, the fairy Kallisto in the Human world below his. He can only observe her through a tidal pool. But this time, she is in danger. Trying to rescue her from a snake, Seti lands in the world below. However, as Kallisto tries to touch him, he flies away back to his hidden place on the beach and listen to Kallisto's conversation with her best friend Kelpie who once again proposes to her and is refused. Kallisto needs to choose between Kelpie or going back to the fairy world to marry prince Kordelius. As the night comes, Kallisto goes home and so does Seti and of course his parents are all weird... (Remember, Seti used his forbidden power and left without an explanation... ) Then Seti was mysteriously pushed in his room, in the dark and apparently turned blind. This week, Seti is trying to control the Chaos who wants to take over his body.

Here are my 8 sentences, the weirdness continues (He is Seti and They are Seti's parents). And we start where we left off last weeks


They wanted to hurt him. They locked him here in the dark with the Chaos inside his head wanting to go out. He could just give in and let it win now. He didn’t remember why he had ever tried to protect them against it. They never really loved him after all. If they had, they would have done things differently on that day and on every following day. He placed his hand on the door. 
“Don’t,” he suddenly remembered her voice “if you could let it go on the other side, I would be grateful,” she had said. 

Answer to last week's comments:

So yes, the Chaos is confusing. It's even confusing for Seti so don't worry, that's normal. When Seti stop being confused, you'll stop being confused too.
Hum, what happen if the Chaos is in control, I wonder too, maybe the same as what happened that day, but what happened that day? Seti will tell you soon enough, he has somebody to scare away. 
And he knows his parents did something, because who else could have, right?
Now, will he team up with the Chaos or will he forbid the Chaos to come out? Let's take bets!


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13 comments:

  1. I'd like to see some threatening moves that makes me come to the conclusion that they wanted to hurt him; however, I like the mental struggle going through his head. It shows how disturbed he is.

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  2. Fingers crossed for you in the "pitch wars". I'm drawn to Seti and I'm sure others will be too.

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  3. Using chaos as a literary device is working out in an interesting way. Nicely done, Linda. :-)

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  4. Hmm, sometimes a little chaos is a good thing. I say he uses it somehow.

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  5. I love this snippet -- very inense. I still want to know about "that day."

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  6. Poor Seti is so conflicted! I hope he listens to her voice in his mind and not the Chaos and not all his bad memories. Tense 8!

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  7. Interesting world and snippet. I'm glad I am supposed to be confused, lol, but I a litter more clearer picture, after reading your short little blurb about what has occurred. Interesting 8.
    Juneta at Writer's Gambit

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  8. interesting, I wonder who the new voice is ...

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  9. My goodness, you don't take it easy on poor Seti!

    There is a lot of confusion, but I read your comments about last week and the curiosity is certainly getting the better of me.

    Seti's internal struggle is frightening, I feel for him.

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  10. I like the feel of this. I'll have to back track some of your older posts to catch up on the story but it feels like a pretty cool world.

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  11. Hmmm. Things are getting dark. Great mood & feel.

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