Sunday, August 24, 2014

WeWriWar 65 Demon and Fairy

Hello everyone!

Welcome to Week-end Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday.
Here we are, back again for a new Excerpt of Demon and Fairy. This week, I entered pitch wars and I'm waiting for the results to come on September 3rd, so cross your fingers for me. 

In the previous episodes: Seti let the chaos got out of him as the father of his sister's fiance threaten to break the engagement. Wild, he flies to the beach to see the only person near whom he can get rid of the Chaos without pain, the fairy Kallisto in the Human world below his. He can only observe her through a tidal pool. But this time, she is in danger. Trying to rescue her from a snake, Seti lands in the world below. However, as Kallisto tries to touch him, he flies away back to his hidden place on the beach and listen to Kallisto's conversation with her best friend Kelpie who once again proposes to her and is refused. Kallisto needs to choose between Kelpie or going back to the fairy world to marry prince Kordelius. As the night comes, Kallisto goes home and so does Seti and of course his parents are all weird... (Remember, Seti used his forbidden power and left without an explanation... ) Then Seti was mysteriously pushed in his room, in the dark and apparently turned blind.

Here are my 8 sentences, the weirdness continues (of course he is Seti). And we start where we left off last weeks.

The voice of Chaos laughed. Seti huddled up on the floor trying to forget the pain; He couldn’t concentrate with the pain, it was hurting too much. He couldn’t remember how many times he had wanted the pain to kill him thinking that if he died at least the pain would stop.
I got to get out of here,” the voice of Chaos yelled again and Seti could feel his hands burn. 
He sat up promptly in the dark, using the Chaos in the darkness wasn’t a good idea. He needed to control it, no matter what. He wondered if he could hurt the Chaos the same way the Chaos hurt him, but it wasn’t a good idea either. He couldn’t fight now, he was feeling too weak and the headache kept on amplifying as if the Chaos wanted to take over his body.
Answer to last week's comments:

I guess we all agree that Seti's day sucks and that the chaos is a pain in the head. Now, I'm not going to tell you what will happen next before it actually happens. ;)
Joyce: Thanks for the edits.
Chip: He had some chicken and potatoes and his usual tomato juice.

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  1. That Chaos dude sounds like a tough customer!
    Someone(thing) to avoid.

  2. Definitely not in a good place right now. I could feel the struggle to keep calm. Well done.

  3. Poor Seti. I can feel his pain, though, and I have to wonder what does happen if he gives in to the Chaos.

  4. You have really captured his confusion and his appealing innocence. He has no idea that his parents are behind this. I'm hooked on this story.

  5. Whoa, I really feel for Seti. Nice job.

  6. Interesting snippet and concept. I enjoyed reading it.
    Juneta at Writer's Gambit

  7. This sounds like a very scary situation for Seti to find himself in.

  8. It's getting more and more intense!

  9. OK, Seti needs to figure out how to beat the Chaos at its own game! I so feel for him...

  10. I'm a little worried about him. He seems to be in dreadful pain.

  11. Interesting. What is this Chaos?

    Just as Seti seems to be, I'm a bit confused about what's going on within him.

  12. Whatever the chaos in his head is, it doesn't sound like it's good for him.

  13. Very good. You've really captured the feel of pain & disorientation here.