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Here are my 8 sentences, beginning of Chapter 3. (Of course, "he" is Seti).
Something was clearly wrong, but Seti just sat down and looked at his mother filling him his plate with chicken and potatoes. His mother never kept him something warm he had to take something out of the fridge himself. She put the plate in front of him and briefly smiled before looking away as if in pain. Seti wondered what happened. He remembered seeing her acting like that before but he couldn’t remember when or why. Something was clearly wrong.
“Eat you diner,” the cold voice of his father brought him back to the reality and he took his fork to eat.
His mum put a glass of tomato juice in front of him.
Answer to last week's comments:
Of course Seti is talking to himself, remember he didn't have anyone to talk to for a while. Don't worry, there is never anyone listening to him either, he is too scary! ;)
Shooting star in French is Étoile filante. I don't translate my novel from French, I write the directly in English, but thanks for correcting the typos, I really appreciate that.
“Eat you diner,” the cold voice of his father brought him back to the reality and he took his fork to eat.
His mum put a glass of tomato juice in front of him.
Answer to last week's comments:
Of course Seti is talking to himself, remember he didn't have anyone to talk to for a while. Don't worry, there is never anyone listening to him either, he is too scary! ;)
Shooting star in French is Étoile filante. I don't translate my novel from French, I write the directly in English, but thanks for correcting the typos, I really appreciate that.
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I'm curious to know when he saw her acting like that before -- and why. And I want to know what's wrong... Very intrigues.
ReplyDelete'Eat your dinner'? That's all he can say? Man, now I really see the coldness of his personality. Good snippet!
ReplyDeleteThey need each other. I hope they realize this soon. Love this story.
ReplyDeleteVery well drawn--I like how you show how Seti knows there's something wrong.
ReplyDeleteYes something is definitely wrong, I expect she'll let it all out with a little persuasion!
ReplyDeleteYou gave us a lot with so few sentences. The father's abrasive personality, Seti sensing something is wrong, and his mom's odd behavior. Well done Linda!
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Can't wait to find out what's wrong.
ReplyDeleteSomething is wrong, but what?
ReplyDeleteGood snippet. It left me wondering why his mom is sad, and why Seti only vaguely recalls that he's seen her life this before. I don't think I like his dad.
ReplyDeleteA lot of emotion in this snippet. Well done!
ReplyDeleteJust curious should this line be: You wrote: “Eat you diner,”
Should it be: "Eat your dinner".