Sunday, March 23, 2014

Demon and Fairy WeWriWar 43

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Today, let's hear Kelpie's answer.
In the previous episodes: Seti was in pain and flying to see Kallisto who is the only person who can help him get rid of it. He remembered how he had met her the first time but unfortunately this time it was late at night and she was nowhere to be seen. Seti couldn't spend the night on the Beach and decided to fly home not noticing that another demon entered her house. We followed Seti and discovered his chaotic bedroom before meeting his family for breakfast. They were arguing about Seti's sister's arranged wedding being canceled by the other family and Samira was crying. Their father said that Seti would just have to apologize. and we learn what Seti thinks about the situation. Seti met the twin's father and gave him an unexpected apology demon style which scared everyone around except Taram who had been spying at the scene from the stairs with his twin brother Torin. After the confrontation, as always when he has a headache, Seti flew to the beach and fell asleep near the tidal pool. When Seti waked, he saw Kallisto facing a snake he managed to get through the barrier and stop it from attacking her, at the moment he is about to kill the snake, Kallisto tells him to stop and had him let the snake on the other side of the barrier. Then Seti had an unexpected reaction but Kallisto didn't going to let him go that easily. Kallisto seems to have a very strange combination of people taking care of the security of the house, which scares Seti a little bit while Kallisto seems to consider that he is her best protection. He decided to fly away then notice the arrival of Kelpie. Kelpie had just ask Kallisto if he has already told her about Kordelius' ugliness. Seti is still around listening to their conversation. Kelpie is going straight to the point. Seti wanted to run away, but still decided to stay. Kelpie continues to tell Kallisto she should married her so she decided to give him a love test. Kallisto asked him: "What do you love about me?" Seti's answered in his head, then we saw Kelpie's answer to Kallisto. Will Kallisto betray her secret? 

Here are my 8 sentences, we start just where we left of. (With crazy punctuation to fit in.)

She looked quickly at the sky like for finding a way to formulate it without betraying her secret, “… like if I was the most important thing around, each word you would say to me would make me feel as if I was the most important thing for you. But you don’t know how to do that because you don’t feel this way toward me,” she said, and she sighed in relief realizing that Kelpie was only partially listening and didn’t noticed her little slip of the tongue.
“Am I really doing that?” Seti asked himself.
“Of course, you are important for me,” Kelpie started to yell. “Why would I come here, every day, to see you, if you were not important for me? Why would I want to marry you if you were not important for me? Why would I want to fight against this stupid idiot of Kordelius for you if you were not freaking important to me? 

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  1. I can hardly wait to hear her reaction to his response! :-) Looks like he was listening to her. :-) Great conflict! :-)

  2. Strong dialogue and emotions -- a great excerpt!

  3. Well, I guess she told him! Love the dynamics in this scene.

  4. Oh great tension :D I wonder what she will say next. The only thing I might change is the part with 'Kelpie started to yell' Maybe you could say, "Kelpie raised her voice" I just thought it was a little off for me, but I'll let you decide. Good snippet!

  5. Love means different things to different people. It seems that the two of them have very different definitions of what love means.

  6. Things are sure heating up! I'm waiting for Seti to open his mouth and say something. :) Speak up man! Go for the girl!
    The Murders of Polly Frisch

  7. Great dynamics in the scene. Looking forward to hear what happens next.

  8. The language of love is NOT just one language--we all express it differently, don't we. Great job with illustrating this.

  9. Can't wait to find out the response! Great snippet!

  10. Kelpie is losing his temper...he still doesn't understand.

  11. I loved Kelpie's response. I agree with P.T. that they seem to be coming for very different perspectives.

  12. Is she looking at the sky, or for Seti?