Sunday, March 19, 2017

WeWriWar 199: Rainbow catcher


Welcome to a new excerpt of Rainbow Catcher for the Weekend Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday.

Now let's go back to our story.

Summary of previous episodes: Clarissa is coughing and wanted to watch Everett Cooper on TV but Jason refused, she is due to get her rainbow the next day but she seems scared, to make her feel better Jason leave the TV on. Clarissa tried to explain about rainbows, she is a big fan of Everett Cooper but Jason is not too sure about it. Clarissa complained about her dialophone but Jason needs to go to work. Before completely leaving he is thinking about getting her her rainbow. We flashed back to the meeting Jason had with a rainbow seller at the black market. Jason left Clarissa's room to go to work. Jason was talking to his boss about the rainbow coming the next day. Jason prepared the money for the rainbow in a sport bag and went to the hospital. The rainbow seller arrived for the delivery. But it was a scam and Jason prepares to go get the rainbow himself in the desert. Markus has a last surprise for him.

We start just where we left off last week.



Push back your feet a little bit,” Markus said turning his face to look down at Jason’s feet. Jason pushed his feet as far as he could on the motorbike's ground.
“Are you ready?” Markus asked.
Jason didn’t know what he was supposed to be ready for, but he nodded. Markus pressed a button with his right thumb and Jason felt crushed back by the acceleration. He was clinging at the handle in his back not to fall off. He couldn’t look at the landscape anymore; the bike was eating the road, it was too fast for his eyes. He wondered how the bike which had seemed so old and fragile the night before could ever withstand such a speed before realizing that it did not look like the same bike anymore.



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21 comments:

  1. Well, the motorbike will get him to his destination faster. :)

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    1. That's the plan since he has no time to lose.

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  2. Vivid snippet and interesting that the bike seems to have changed. I'm intrigued.

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    1. I couldn't just have a normal bike, he is in a hurry, lol.

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  3. Different bike and he's in big trouble right now. You set the scene so well, Linda. Spooky.

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    1. Yeah, I think he is in trouble too, I would be scared of that bike if I were him.

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  4. He's in for the ride of his life! Hang on!

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  5. Hmm, definitely a special bike. Hope it gets him where he wants to go extra-fast!

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    1. I still think he is going to need some help.

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  6. So this is the surprise you mentioned in the blurb!

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    1. Yes, it has to be more than meets the eyes. ;)

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  7. Great descriptions of the scene, I could definitely see it all in my head and feel the acceleration.

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    1. Nice, I was wondering is shorter sentences wouldn't work better.

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  8. Not a very nice surprise for Jason.

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    1. Yes, Jason is probably the last person wanting a dangerously fast bike, especially if he needs to ride it.

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  9. Nifty bike that changes at massive speed. I like it.

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    1. That's the story's steampunk touch. ;)

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  10. Seems there was more to the bike than there appeared to be. Great unexpected twist!

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  11. You mentioned shorter sentences (in the comments). I agree. You've got a lot of action, but longer sentences slow things down. If you did that to keep within the rules, just ignore me. :) Great snippet.

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