Sunday, May 1, 2016

WeWriWar 153: Rainbow Catcher


Welcome to a new excerpt of Rainbow Catcher for the Weekend Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday

Now let's go back to our story.

Summary of previous episodes: Clarissa is coughing and wanted to watch Everett Cooper on TV but Jason refused, she is due to get her rainbow the next day but she seems scared, to make her feel better Jason leave the TV on. Clarissa tried to explain about rainbows, she is a big fan of Everett Cooper but Jason is not too sure about it. Clarissa complained about her dialophone but Jason needs to go to work. Before completely leaving he is thinking about getting her her rainbow. We flashed back to the meeting Jason had with a rainbow seller at the black market. Jason left Clarissa's room to go to work. Jason was talking to his boss about the rainbow coming the next day. Jason prepared the money for the rainbow in a sport bag and went to the hospital. The rainbow seller arrived for the delivery.

We start just where we left off last week.

“You have to go out so that I check the sound,” Clarissa said examining the screen carefully.
Jason walked out and closed the door behind him.
“How is it?” he said in the dialophone.
“Hum, speak more.”
“I don’t need to speak more, I don’t know what to say. Either it's good or it's not,” he said before getting back inside. 

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30 comments:

  1. LOL! I want him to hum. Perhaps sing a little ditty? I still want one of those nifty gadgets.

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  2. "Either it's good or it's not." Best response ever! lol Good snippet, Linda!

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  3. I don't know how this snippet would read in context, but standing by itself it's rather humorous. I was reminded about some old commercials for a cellphone carrier, where the man goes to various parts of the country and says "Can you hear me now?"

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  4. I like her response. Well done.

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  5. At least she didn't say "say more" because I would have responded "more" to that one...heh.

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  6. I hope it worked, because I think he's had enough. I would feel the same way. Nice snippet!

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  7. He seems a little terse. I think he needs to have more patience with her, although she doesn't seem to mind his attitude.

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  8. Love the idea of being able to buy a rainbow. Fun snippet.

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  9. I agree with Jenna. But he sounds just like most men would. Nice snippet, Linda

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  10. LOL! "Either it's good or it's not" sounds like the kind of thing I'd say :)

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  11. Interesting snippet. Liked it.
    Tweeted :-)

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  12. Love their banter. Typical brother and sister communication. :)

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  13. This is my first visit to your blog, so I am not sure of the back story. Not sure why she wants a rainbow, and what she will do with it when she gets it. However, I'm sure I will pick up the story in a week or two. I will come back and read again.

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  14. Aw, he could at least play along for a minute. Typical brother.

    ~Joyce Scarbrough

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  15. Such a guy, black and white, good or not good....but a nice snippet!

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  16. Absolutely he should hum and maybe sing something! One short line isn't enough to tell if it's working well, imho. At least, that's what I'd tell my brother in order to get him to do something silly. ;-)

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  17. Brothers . . . can't smack 'em, can't put up with their craziness.

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  18. Haha- love the dynamics between these two!

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  19. I enjoyed that little touch of humor here.

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  20. Oh, come on, three short words isn't enough of a sound check!

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  21. This is my first reading with The Rainbow Catcher, so I have no idea of the rainbow's significance. Wished I had a blurb.

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  22. all the time he is taking to argue about saying more he could have been doing a thorough sound check, lol.

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  23. Nice, either it's good or it's not. Sounds like she doesn't want to tell him. Great snippet!

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  24. I could see the logic of the answer. Either it's good or it's not. If you have to decide, it's not. :)

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  25. Fun snippet. Love the interaction between the two of them. I think he's getting a little tired of her problems with the dialophone -- user/operator error gets annoying when you have to correct it too many times.

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  26. I can relate - I never know what to say either in these situations!

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  27. Sounds logical enough to me.

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  28. Such a typical "guy" response from Jason, but that makes him believable! I hope he can be patient with her.

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