Sunday, June 9, 2013

Demon and Fairy WeWriWar 5


Hello Warriors and dear readers. 
Thank you so much for all the comments you left on last week-end snippet and special thanks to Cindy and Natalie for the edits, Siren Star for the shout out and Sharon for the head up about autocrit.  
Now let's go to this week snippet, more on Demon and Fairy

In the previous episodes, Seti was in pain and flying to see Kallisto who is the only person who can help him get ride of it. He remembered how he had met her the first time but unfortunately this time it was late at night and she was nowhere to be seen. Seti couldn't spend the night on the Beach and decided to fly home not noticing that another demon entered her house. Last week we discovered Seti's chaotic bedroom today we are going to meet his family.

Here are my 8 sentences

He opened the kitchen door. His father was sitting at the table arguing with his mother and his sister was in tears.
“The day had started so well”, Seti thought for himself.
“He is not good for you”, his father said.
Samira didn’t answer, she didn’t care really, she knew that already.
“It was decided before they were born, our first son marry their first daughter or our first daughter marry their first son, they can’t change everything like that after eighteen years”, Seti’s mother said probably for the tenth times in a row.
“Well Seti will have to apologize then. It’s probably all he wants”, Seti’s father answered.


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25 comments:

  1. Not your average, ordinary family! :-D They certainly do argue like one though. Interesting story and I'm looking forward to the next instalment.

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  2. Oh, I feel for her. Sounds like she's a tough situation.

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  3. Sounds like a huge pickle they're all in. Interesting! :-)

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  4. I guess we'll find out if an apology is all they want. Nice 8.

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  5. Arranged marriage holds so many possibilities...will they fall in love or will it be traumatic? It's sort of like the ultimate gamble. Can't wait to see what happens.

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  6. Curious snippet. Family dynamics are always so interesting.

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  7. Apologize or not to apologize...hmm... can't wait to find out. :)

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  8. Poor Seti, things going bad to worse obviously! Good luck to him!

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  9. Interested to see how this all works out! Enjoyed the snippet.

    ~Joyce Scarbrough

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  10. Seti...I like that! And a nice snippet.

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  11. What a scene to walk into. I feel terrible for her. Great job at pulling at our heart strings. :)

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  12. Complicated family! You've set up for quite the family drama - someone's got to give in, or else the whole family - or more - will be in turmoil!
    Just a suggestion: be careful about head hopping. You start out with Seti's thoughts, then you switch to Samira's. If you write from Seti's point of view, write only what he'd know. If he knows what Samira thinks, that's cool, just present it so we know it's coming from Seti.
    Looking forward to seeing what happens next week!

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  13. Ah, an arranged marriage. While there is something to said for tradition, I feel for her!

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  14. Hmmm. "That's all he wants"?? Somehow I don't think that's true.

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  15. This sounds like their trouble is only getting started. Why do I have the feeling an apology isn't going to be enough?

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  16. Why would Seti have to apologize? Realistic dialogue between the family.

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  17. I'm coming into this story late, but I suspect that the arranged marriage is not a good thing.

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  18. I love getting to see the dynamics of a family amongst such fantastic settings. You got down the family squabble feel perfectly!

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  19. Ouch. Sounds like a difficult situation. Great snippet.

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  20. Uh, oh. Sounds serious...arranged marriages are always "interesting."

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  21. Arranged marriage. Oh my. Does the family lose something if they don't marry? I'm curious why Seti is the one who has to apologize. Very realistic. Who hasn't walked into a family argument and wanted to slowly back out of the room.
    History Sleuth's Milk Carton Murders

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  22. Updated Romeo and Juliet in the making. Great premise.

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  23. Oh no - an arranged marriage in the works - this is not looking good for Seti (or his sister - love her name, Samira, really unique:)
    WriterlySam

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  24. Interesting insight into the family. Sorry for my late response. I am still learning how this works!

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