Sunday, September 1, 2013

Demon and Fairy WeWriWar 15

Hello Warriors and dear readers, welcome to another Week-end Writing Warrior blog post.
Thank you for all the comments last week, they made me very happy.

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Now let's go to this week snippet, more on Demon and Fairy.
As it seems from last week comments that a lot of people are interested in what the barrier actually does, let us have a special post today and fast forwardto chapter 7 to see the barrier in action.

In the previous episodes: Seti was in pain and flying to see Kallisto who is the only person who can help him get ride of it. He remembered how he had met her the first time but unfortunately this time it was late at night and she was nowhere to be seen. Seti couldn't spend the night on the Beach and decided to fly home not noticing that another demon entered her house. We followed Seti and discovered his chaotic bedroom before meeting his family for breakfast. They were arguing about Seti's sister's arranged wedding being canceled by the other family and Samira was crying. Their father said that Seti would just have to apologize. and we learn what Seti thinks about the situation. Seti met the twin's father and gave him an unexpected apology demon style which scared everyone around except Taram who had been spying at the scene from the stairs with his twin brother Torin. After the confrontation, as always when he has a headache, Seti flew to the beach and fell asleep near the tidal pool. When Seti waked, he saw Kallisto facing a snake he managed to get through the barrier and stop it from attacking her, at the moment he is about to kill the snake, Kallisto tells him to stop. Today we will see what happens to that snake.

Here are my 8 sentences. Enjoy!

“It’s here,” Sahel said pointing at a nearby house, “be careful we have a protective barrier which gives electric shocks…. Oups!”
He didn’t have time to finish his sentences that a green flash burst out of the barrier separating Evalynn and Azazel who felt loudly on the ground.
“That’s what I was trying to warn you about,” Sahel said landing slowly on the ground and making sure Seti was ok.
“It’s your entire fault, I told you to let me handle this but you think you’re so strong and good at everything, let me tell you, you are just an idiot,” Evalynn said getting up and brushing the dust out of her clothes.
“I’m hurt,” Azazel said jokingly.
“I don’t care,” Evalynn said walking away to join Seti and Sahel leaving him where he was.
He tried to get up but fell back.
“Your hair is… green”, Seti said. 

 I hope you enjoyed today's excerpt and see you next week for more of Seti's adventures.

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  1. You got that YA dialog down very well.
    Nice snippett.

  2. Enjoyed the snippet. Nice banter. So green hair...hmmm...

    Note: in this sentence...
    "..who felt loudly on the ground."

    Did you mean "fell"?

  3. “Your hair is… green” LOL I love this line!

  4. “Your hair is… green” LOL I love this line!

  5. Always a new development! Enjoyed their dialog...couldn't comment the last two weeks, had browser problems on my end, but I enjoyed Seti saving the snake.

  6. Nice snippet. In first sentence, did you mean "Oops"?

  7. Wow, lots of snark happening there...

    At least the snake's okay, right?

  8. Linda, so much fun going on in your eight this week! Made me smile!

  9. Did that turn her hair green? I like that she doesn't take any crap from him though. Despite his blowups, shes not afraid to tell him how it is. Good 8.

  10. Seti's personality really shines, as brightly as her hair now does... You've done a great job using dialogue to show what each character is really like.

    What a unique world you are creating ... very nice snippet - thanks!

  11. Love the banter between them! And green hair...nice! Want to know more. Enjoyed your 8!