Hello everyone!
Welcome to Week-end Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday. How are your Halloween events going? Mine are going fine for the moment, I only have few more to attend.
Here are my 8 sentences, we start where we left off last week with the boy's mum telling him not to touch the ball.
“I
didn’t come near him, he came to me, I didn’t do anything wrong,”
Seti yelled.
The
heat came to his hands, like that day. He had never forgotten.
He left the ball roll on the floor and hid his closed fists in his
pocket. The Chaos was yelling at him to let his anger out, to let go
of everything. The Chaos said that everything would improve if Seti
listened to him. But Seti was facing his father, and he couldn’t
let his old man be right, and show him something wrong was happening.
In this uncomfortable position, he learned to fight the Chaos and he
learned that his father was too scared to do anything to him.
Answer to last week's comments:
I know we are all siding rightfully with Seti, but you'll understand his dad a few chapters later, at least if we ever get that far.
I know we are all siding rightfully with Seti, but you'll understand his dad a few chapters later, at least if we ever get that far.
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If we get that far? Unfair! ;) I get his dad's point too. Uncontrolled emotion like that could end with his son locked up and someone hurt.
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It seems as if Seti is growing and getting stronger, he now has more control over the influences around him.
ReplyDeleteYou're doing a wonderful job, Linda, of writing conflict into his family dynamics. Should he trust the chaos...or shouldn't he? :-) Good 8!
ReplyDeleteGreat tension and character elements, well done!
ReplyDeleteI feel so bad for him. You can really feel all his emotions here. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteInterested to see the dad's side of this. I do feel for Seti. Nicely done. :)
ReplyDeleteI love the way you're using all of these mythological characters in your story. It's very inventive. Sounds like Seti is just getting in deeper and deeper.
ReplyDeletePoor Seti, this guy really needs a break. He's really a good kid...demon...well you know : )
ReplyDeleteYou can't help but feel sorry for Seti with his need to feel accepted by others and his wish to control the Chaos so other did not fear him. Well done.
ReplyDeleteInteresting. I'm definitely curious about the story. :)
ReplyDeleteLike how the emotion inside almost becomes another character.
ReplyDeleteWell I'm still all in with Seti. He's doing the best he can!
ReplyDeleteHow he fights for control and wins is remarkable. Father to son conflict forever. Beautiful, Linda.
ReplyDeletePoor Seti! feeling all alone like that without any support especially from a parent is the loneliest of feelings. great 8! can't wait to reada his dad's reasons.
ReplyDeleteAnother intriguing snippet.
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet!
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