Thank you for all the comments on last Sunday's post, I really enjoyed reading all of them and I hope I didn't miss anyone when visiting back.
It seems that last week's excerpt left you with some questions about Kallisto. A part of me wanted to write an excerpt about it today by jumping to chapter 2 but it would probably make things even more confusing as we go, so let me answer first then stick with Seti for a while. Kallisto is not a water fairy, she is one the ground in her world while Seti is looking at her from a world above, if you ask me how the entire beach can stay on the top of the fairy tree, well I will just say it's magical. We could possibly deal into details about other dimension but I haven't done it in the novel. The way the different worlds are linked to each other will probably become clearer to you as we continue our story.
In the preceding episode (second episode)
Seti remembered how he had seen Kallisto for the first time through a flack on the beach. This time he is quite out of luck because she isn't here. Remember that in the first episode, he was flying to the beach in pain hoping to see her and get rid of his headache.
Here are today's 8 sentences.
He felt on the ground near the flack which was only enlightened by the reflection of the moon.
Her see-saw was empty.
He hesitated a little, trying to get his breath back, looking for her image in the pond.
He imagined her here laughing and playing the flute just for him to hear but nothing worked.
It was all useless, without her, there was no way the pain was going to disappear so easily.
He sighed and stood up slowly, brusque movements were hurting him as if his brain was knocking against his head’s bones.
He couldn’t stay here too long tonight.
Without a last look, he flew away and didn’t notice the other demon who had just landed in the garden of her house and flew high speed through one of the second floor bedroom’s window.
I hope you enjoyed this week-end snippet. See you around on the other Warriors' blogs and see you next week for more of Seti's adventure.
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I suppose the demon flying in the window will be trouble for everyone.
ReplyDeleteI have to agree with Elaine. Can't wait to see what the trouble will be :)
ReplyDeleteDemons tend to sneak in like that, don't they? Trouble brewing.
ReplyDeleteI hate it when the demons fly in the window! :)
ReplyDeleteCan't wait to see what happens next.
Hmmm. Just coming in on the story but love your voice. I'm intrigued.
ReplyDeleteI'm intrigued. I'm just coming into the story but definitely want more.
ReplyDeleteThat can't be good. Wish I could yell at him to go back, lol. More please.
ReplyDeleteI see trouble is ahead. Nice snippet!
ReplyDeleteUh-oh. That can't be good.
ReplyDeleteAnother demon! This will be interesting, for sure! Looking forward to the next instalment.
ReplyDeleteI'm just jumping in on your story. The pain is intriguing and the fact that he needs her help to make it go away.
ReplyDelete~Summer
I love Seti's attachment to her. And I'm sensing he's about to forget his headache and give somebody else some pain!
ReplyDelete~Joyce Scarbrough
Intriguing. So many things going on here in just eight sentences. Well done!
ReplyDeleteInteresting story. Many of your sentences start with "he" which disturbs the natural flow, or it did to me anyway... it's something my readers point out in my work
ReplyDeleteI'm just coming in on this one myself. Interesting setup. He seems to be mourning someone, which makes me wonder what happened to her. And that demon can't possibly be good...
ReplyDeleteBut will he see her again? And what is the demon trailing him for? Trouble ahead!
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So there are demons are her world too. Can Seti get to her world?
ReplyDeleteSo there are demons are her world too. Can Seti get to her world?
ReplyDeleteIntriguing storyline, Linda. :)
ReplyDeleteGiven that the demon is going through the window, rather than the door, I have to agree that it sounds like trouble.
ReplyDeleteGiven that the demon is going through the window instead of the front door, I have to agree that it seems like trouble is brewing.
ReplyDeleteYes, definitely trouble on the horizon. Very interesting!
ReplyDeleteThat is one well described and painful headache! I can feel it... And I'm with everyone else - intrigued by the new demon who snuck in the window. Terrific snippet!
ReplyDeleteUh-oh. Was it an accident that second demon was there? Or is Seti being followed? Hmmm.
ReplyDeleteNice snippet! Can't wait to see what the demon does.
ReplyDeleteNot looking good with a demon flying through the window. He's going to have more than a headache to deal with!
ReplyDeleteOoo, love it! Bring on the demon! Very intriguing 8! :D
ReplyDeleteVery cool premise! I enjoy your style and I'm looking forward to the next excerpt! :)
ReplyDeleteDon't you just hate it when demons fly in your window? Question is, did he actually lead them there? Now we just need him to go back.
ReplyDeleteThis is an intriguing world you've created!
ReplyDeleteWing and demons--I'm in! Enjoyed this snippet.
ReplyDeleteSounds like there is something about her that attracts danger. What is it about her that lures demons to her? Very intriguing. And I wonder if Seti will come to her rescue. Nice 8!
ReplyDeleteJust coming into the story as well. Even with just 8 sentences, a lot can be said so nicely worded. Intrigued to see what will happen with the demons entering at the end... Hmm...
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