tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post7760383518314170484..comments2023-11-20T10:33:19.944+09:00Comments on Mes crazy expériences: WeWriWar 115: Rainbow Catcher Lindahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13346034896296813841noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-78912567879768643432015-08-10T23:41:56.458+09:002015-08-10T23:41:56.458+09:00Great description. I love this scene. I felt like ...Great description. I love this scene. I felt like I was there.Ceciliahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07076648307785084672noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-70381921383723852102015-08-10T14:15:50.899+09:002015-08-10T14:15:50.899+09:00"He breathed like a bull and smelled like it ..."He breathed like a bull and smelled like it too." Great description, and I can really feel his apprehension and nervousness in this snippet. Nice job.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-33780590829753436362015-08-10T13:58:59.532+09:002015-08-10T13:58:59.532+09:00Terrific description. I love that the rose seems ...Terrific description. I love that the rose seems to be the only bright and colorful thing there. PThttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02077084023001310425noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-59448511800036566402015-08-10T13:58:59.004+09:002015-08-10T13:58:59.004+09:00Terrific description. I love that the rose seems ...Terrific description. I love that the rose seems to be the only bright and colorful thing there. PThttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02077084023001310425noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-38837229195569444772015-08-10T11:22:28.722+09:002015-08-10T11:22:28.722+09:00You put readers right into the scene.
Well done!You put readers right into the scene.<br />Well done!FCEtierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14199098303138353894noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-60362144252329829532015-08-10T10:19:18.402+09:002015-08-10T10:19:18.402+09:00I like the comparison to a bull.I like the comparison to a bull.Elaine Cantrellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05668294337075373288noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-63198867404674286122015-08-10T09:56:12.379+09:002015-08-10T09:56:12.379+09:00Poor Jason, being driven to deal with someone so u...Poor Jason, being driven to deal with someone so unsavory. The world of black-market dealings is something for all but the most desperate to avoid. I hope he does his business swiftly and without too much incident. Good tension.Chelle Corderohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15412268726863698528noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-89004994801796657072015-08-10T06:34:45.361+09:002015-08-10T06:34:45.361+09:00Excellent description, both visually and olfactora...Excellent description, both visually and olfactorally. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-36663811457859370882015-08-10T04:58:30.278+09:002015-08-10T04:58:30.278+09:00Great use of the sense. I can smell that man, and....Great use of the sense. I can smell that man, and...disgusting. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08486824276807575493noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-6567324437637898542015-08-10T02:48:45.404+09:002015-08-10T02:48:45.404+09:00Great visuals. I love your snippetGreat visuals. I love your snippetNaomi Shawhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16693171140434692340noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-70836770910380776182015-08-10T01:33:49.397+09:002015-08-10T01:33:49.397+09:00Great imagery. I could visualize the guy right dow...Great imagery. I could visualize the guy right down to the smell. :) Well done.Karen Michelle Nutthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04083893569523248900noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-77967662636438417682015-08-10T01:19:19.243+09:002015-08-10T01:19:19.243+09:00Rainbows are so beautiful and in such contrast to ...Rainbows are so beautiful and in such contrast to the grubbiness he's having to endure to obtain one. I like the way you're juxtaposing the two concepts in this story. Great snippet.Veronica Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04732940088047026021noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-24713362868907287242015-08-09T22:03:08.506+09:002015-08-09T22:03:08.506+09:00I'm with Jason. This is not someone who I'...I'm with Jason. This is not someone who I'd want to share space and time with. Gem Sivadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01233835029255570402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-1838073151933735532015-08-09T20:50:53.603+09:002015-08-09T20:50:53.603+09:00Nice tension in this scene. Your description of th...Nice tension in this scene. Your description of the man in the grey suit has me worried, and why is he looking over Jason's shoulder like that?Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15615944959979986826noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-80450443765967738632015-08-09T15:44:28.906+09:002015-08-09T15:44:28.906+09:00You're describing him as "disgusting"...You're describing him as "disgusting" pretty well ... that's exactly the impression I had.Iris Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07282988971025667976noreply@blogger.com