tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post3239292637983955064..comments2023-11-20T10:33:19.944+09:00Comments on Mes crazy expériences: Demon and Fairy WeWriWar 51Lindahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13346034896296813841noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-72452962629993261922014-05-19T22:18:19.235+09:002014-05-19T22:18:19.235+09:00A lot of emotion in this snippet. Well done!
Just...A lot of emotion in this snippet. Well done!<br /><br />Just curious should this line be: You wrote: “Eat you diner,”<br /><br />Should it be: "Eat your dinner".<br /><br />Karen Michelle Nutthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04083893569523248900noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-5375258931982369222014-05-19T19:51:07.594+09:002014-05-19T19:51:07.594+09:00Good snippet. It left me wondering why his mom is ...Good snippet. It left me wondering why his mom is sad, and why Seti only vaguely recalls that he's seen her life this before. I don't think I like his dad.Teresa Cypherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08940430996766842518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-44547895637398279352014-05-19T13:44:57.511+09:002014-05-19T13:44:57.511+09:00Something is wrong, but what?Something is wrong, but what?Sue Ann Bowlinghttp://homecomingbook.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-10974457751516045572014-05-19T05:36:50.041+09:002014-05-19T05:36:50.041+09:00Can't wait to find out what's wrong.Can't wait to find out what's wrong.Elaine Cantrellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05668294337075373288noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-38654155942058610352014-05-19T04:02:21.448+09:002014-05-19T04:02:21.448+09:00You gave us a lot with so few sentences. The fathe...You gave us a lot with so few sentences. The father's abrasive personality, Seti sensing something is wrong, and his mom's odd behavior. Well done Linda!<br />http://historysleuth.blogspot.com/2014/05/milk-carton-murders-34.htmlHistorySleuthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05502098938801373264noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-85472241969632200462014-05-19T03:42:57.517+09:002014-05-19T03:42:57.517+09:00Yes something is definitely wrong, I expect she...Yes something is definitely wrong, I expect she'll let it all out with a little persuasion!gemma parkeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06275261646534324484noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-61115367563048861262014-05-19T00:38:08.589+09:002014-05-19T00:38:08.589+09:00Very well drawn--I like how you show how Seti know...Very well drawn--I like how you show how Seti knows there's something wrong.Karysa Fairehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09519776785650008126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-64651847486357979102014-05-18T21:04:27.329+09:002014-05-18T21:04:27.329+09:00They need each other. I hope they realize this soo...They need each other. I hope they realize this soon. Love this story. Gem Sivadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01233835029255570402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-84480321067788479702014-05-18T18:41:07.908+09:002014-05-18T18:41:07.908+09:00'Eat your dinner'? That's all he can s...'Eat your dinner'? That's all he can say? Man, now I really see the coldness of his personality. Good snippet!Frank Fisherhttp://www.frankmfisher.netnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3047453099179396314.post-28566329413047888352014-05-18T15:24:55.754+09:002014-05-18T15:24:55.754+09:00I'm curious to know when he saw her acting lik...I'm curious to know when he saw her acting like that before -- and why. And I want to know what's wrong... Very intrigues. P.T.Wyanthttp://ptwyant.comnoreply@blogger.com