Sunday, July 6, 2014

Demon and Fairy WeWriWar 58

Hello everyone !

Welcome to Week-end Writing Warrior and Snippet Sunday.

This time I'm back to Demon and Fairy once again. I think I'll be alternating between Demon and Fairy and Harajuku Kiss from now on as you seemed to have enjoyed the snippet last week. I'm not sure yet, as Harajuku Kiss is written in first person it's a little hard to cut the monologues into short pieces and still make sense.

In the previous episodes: Seti let the chaos got out of him as the father of his sister fiance threaten to break the engagement. Wild, he fly to the beach to see the only person near who he can get ride of the Chaos without pain, the fairy Kallisto in the Human world below his. He can only observe her through a tidal pool. But this time, she is in danger. Trying to rescue her from a snake, Seti lands in the world below. However, as Kallisto tries to touch him he flies away back to his hidden place on the beach and listen to Kallisto's conversation with her best friend Kelpie who once again proposes to her and is refused. Kallisto needs to chose between Kelpie or going back to the fairy world to marry prince Kordelius. As the night come, Kallisto goes home and so does Seti and of course his parents are all weird... (remember Seti used his forbidden power and left without an explanation... )

Here are my 8 sentences with creative punctuation for everything to fit, the weirdness continues (of course he is Seti). And we start just where we left off 2 weeks ago.

What has to be done, has to be done,” his father had said.
Well, at least he was ready for it now, he entered the shower and turned the water on, he could feel the crispy sand in the bathtub under his feet, he passed a hand in his wet hair and realized that they were full of sand too. No doubt that his father thought that he had been fighting.
That’s what I got for falling asleep on the beach, what would have happen to her if I hadn’t woke up?” He said out loud.
You are my hero you know. I have a white knight to take care of me now.”
Her words resonated in his head, he smiled and played with the water leaking in his hand; tonight, the shower only shed tears of happiness.
Answer to last week's comments:

So how do they get to ordering Salmon to eating spaghetti has been answered here
About "his pushing a button & her looking around", In Japanese restaurant you have a little device with a button to call the waiter. So when you are ready to order or want water or anything, you just press the buttons and they show up. And she was looking around because Seiji has a search warrant on his head...
Thanks for the encouragements everyone!

If you are interested, you can read more about Demon and Fairy here. Discover the excerpts of other participants through the Week-end Writing Warriors's blog here.
Facebook Snippet Sunday group for more posts here.

Follow my blog with Bloglovin
Find us on Google+


  1. I liked the analogy with the shower and tears.

  2. Oh Seti and his thoughts. He's happy for the moment. Love the last line "...tonight, the shower only shed tears of happiness."

  3. Excellent snippet, lovely descriptions, I especially like this line, 'crispy sand in the bathtub under his feet,'.

  4. This line is so sweet...

    Her words resonated in his head, he smiled and played with the water leaking in his hand; tonight, the shower only shed tears of happiness

  5. Awww, love the last sentence about the shower only shedding tears of happiness! Not that is a cool line indeed!

  6. Excellent... I enjoyed this moment of reflection...

  7. Lovely scene. I can feel his happiness as much as I can feel the sand under his feet.

  8. I don't like the way his father is planning something. It seems very ominous. At the same time it was a lovely scene as Seti showers and remembers his heroic moment.

  9. Found myself wondering at first if it was a sand shower. (Well, you never know with fantasy.)

  10. Oh, I like his remembering her words...cute.